the soft light touched her skin like a satin ribbon---she didn't open her eyes, although she was certainly awake
the thoughts of her dreams, echoed in her memory and she closed her eyelids tighter as this could change it
many years had left her wiser and wiser still she would become--- still she struggled---how futile it all seemed at times
and then like a candle's brilliance in the early evening's dimness--it would hit her---she knew, she could go on, not only on but follow
follow an unknown thing, but so real she could feel it's breath on her moist neck
only she knew her intent and strength, only she could end this dream
Great post of hope and detemination.
ReplyDeletethanks so much susan :)
DeleteI agree with Susan. Nicely done!
ReplyDeletehaha thank you dana :)
DeleteBeautiful prose. So rich, and that imagery... Scrumptious. =)
ReplyDeletewow thanks crystal!:)
DeleteShe is a strong, strong woman. A wonderful little picture.
ReplyDeletei hope she is---i wanted her to be--thanks joanne :)
DeleteDefinitely a strong character. Great piece.
ReplyDeletei think she is getting there! thanks suzanne :)
DeleteHang in there, Lynn - this too shall pass.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this piece of writing... look forward to reading more and finding out how the dream ends.
With sunny smiles being sent your way, Jenny
i think that particular dream just has to end---so true that things do pass, and that is usually a good thing, huh---sunny smiles received and sent your way too, thanks jenny :)
DeleteI read this three times...theres a real sense of self-determination...taking charge of ones own destiny...
ReplyDeletei think she is finally aware that that is what she must do--thanks for the interest in this piece zoe!!
DeleteI think you could turn some of your writing into song lyrics, Lynn. What do you think? More people would be helped by your words.
ReplyDeletewell i used to write songs and sing--but i don't think i have it in me anymore--but that is very sweet of you to say :)
DeleteI'm curious about her dream. Sounds like it could be something she is hoping/dreaming to be true someday. Then again, it could be she was hoping to dream a bit more and change the dream to something else. Will we find out?
ReplyDeletei think she did want the dream to come true, but knew it shouldn't---thanks donna :)
Deletewow! great piece! Keep up that wonderful talent of yours. :)
ReplyDeleteHope you had a wonderful Mother's Day!
that's very sweet---i did have a pretty nice day, hope you did too! thanks marie :)
ReplyDeleteI love words that give me a picture. Great job.
ReplyDeleteawww i am glad! thanks teresa :)
ReplyDeleteIt takes a lot of strength to keep hoping a follow a dream.
ReplyDeletei agree, i really can--thanks sherry :)
Deletelovely words and sentence structures! :)
ReplyDeleteLetters To Juliet
why thank you mitha :)
DeleteAlmost my dream last night Lynn. It wasn't light with me though, it was a galaxy and I floated within it. Thing was too was that I was conscious. Any more dreams like this and I'll suspect an alien entity !
ReplyDeleteYou have a love way with words.
............also lovely !
Deletehaha i knew what you meant and wow---you could be onto something with that alien thing ;) thanks my friend :)
DeleteI like to reflect on those kind of dreams. The ones I try to hold on to a little bit longer than I should. Very pretty piece today!
ReplyDeletehaha i know--it is tempting to hold on--thanks theresa :)
DeleteIt's amazing how our dreams can speak to us like this isn't it?
ReplyDeleteit always does amaze :)
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