Tuesday, June 12, 2012

and you're reading this and laughing

i have been wanting to share this song with everyone, for some reason---i wrote it long ago --an older friend even played the guitar and recorded it many years ago---as it stands here in poem form---i have been hesitant to share it- for one thing, i hardly ever use rhyme in my poetry and this song has one bad word in it, that i do not want to take out-----

                                     and you're reading this and laughing


dreaming things that are, dreading things that aren't, holding onto words, forgetting things i saw
killing all my chances and never asking why, selling all my morals, and finding faults to buy


and you're reading this and laughing at my total lack of pride, still it's hurting you a little to see my other side


don't know when all this started, can't see when it'll end, don't really give a damn, it's the way i've always been
things get built up, to high to see the top, and trying to look over, ya find out what you're not-


and you're reading this and laughing at my total lack of pride, still it's hurting you a little to see my other side


while the sensible people, make what they wish, when it all comes out, it makes less sense than this-


and you're reading this and laughing, at my total lack of pride, still it's hurting you a little to see my other side-

62 comments:

  1. Wow. I think this is great. Do you write poetry regularly?

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  2. i have always written poetry but i haven't done too much of it lately--like i said, this was a song--but as far as writing goes, i think i would say poetry is my first love--thanks so much mare :)

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  3. I think this is very good! Awesome job!

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  4. Seriously?! This is amazing. LOVE it!!!

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  5. Love this, Lynn! You need to write more songs. :)

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    1. i haven't felt inspired to write any songs, but poetry yes--but hey who know, right--thanks for the encouragement dana!:)

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  6. I loved this too! You must write more!

    I have awards for you on my blog :)

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    1. haha thanks on both accounts nikki!!!

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  7. That's nice! Now I want to hear it set to music.

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  8. Loved the poem. It was very good and I agree with others on the music. :)

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  9. You're so good with words. You should post a vocal of the song. I would love to hear the tune you set it to.

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    1. oh thanks so much susan---it is a small possibility ---i mainly put it up as poetry today :)

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  10. I love this! I'd love to hear it with music

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    1. it could happen haha---thanks heather:)

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  11. Lynn this is fantastic! Love it. :)

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  12. I agree, you should post a video of you performing it!

    Also, I nominated your blog for the ONe Lovely Blog Award today on my blog.

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    1. i might---won't be the same as all those years ago--when i was young and cute haha--and thanks michelle for the award!!!!

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  13. how fun that you recorded it; cute lyrics; I think you did great with it!

    betty

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    1. well i recorded it before my friend put his guitar to it--both of our recordings were on cassette tapes--thanks betty :)

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  14. Hey! When I read 'and you're reading this and laughing at my total lack of pride' it hit a real nerve with me. I would also like to hear the melody you had in mind for this...

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    1. i don't have a recording of it--maybe if i am super secure--i will sing it and let my daughter post it one day--thanks kate!

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  15. I write without a lack of pride. I think of that quote from Pulp Fiction where Ving Rhame's character tells Bruce Willis. "That's just pride messing with you." Of course, I cleaned it up to a G-rating.

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    1. i haven't seen that stephen, interesting quote!

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  16. This is great! I'd love to hear it as a song.

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    1. thanks michelle--i don't have it on anything i can share at this time :)

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  17. Nope not on Utube....Why? LOL!

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    1. i wish i could get the man who put the song on guitar and use to sing in different places---to sing it again--but i don't think he is able--thanks siv!!

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  18. I used to write songs and when I was much younger--way younger played and sang in a band. So I can see (and hear) how this would be a great song.

    Great job.

    Are you going to do it again? Write a song or poem?

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    1. cool---it was so much fun wasn't it---thanks teresa---i still write poetry---songs, not so much interest for me any longer--but it could come back!

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  19. You need to post it on youtube so we can hear the tune.

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com

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    1. haha it possibly could maybe happen---but probably not--thanks joyce :)

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  20. Uh, "damn" is the bad word? Not any more--I've heard many a song with much worse.
    I with the others who'd like to hear it sung.
    Good lyrics.


    Lee
    An A to Z Co-Host
    Tossing It Out

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    1. haha i know--it's not that bad----i just might do it--but it would have to be A capella---thanks lee :)

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  21. Fantastic lyrics. I'm glad you shared the song.

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  22. Good job. Looks like you had fun with it.

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  23. I think 'damn' is one of those words that needs to stay once it's in. There really isn't another that can replace it without feeling like it's a stand-in, you know what I mean?

    You are such a tender heart, Lynn. I am so glad we've 'met.'

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    1. i do know what ya mean---awwwww that is so sweet--i am so happy to know you too, thanks suze :)

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  24. The is beautiful. It tugs at my heart. Very nice, Lynn.

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  25. I'm impressed, Lynn. I've never tried writing song lyrics and I'm not much good at writing poetry. I'll bet the recording sounds great.

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    1. as i remember it did--it was my friend playing guitar and him singing it--i can't even find it now!--thanks patricia!

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