Thursday, January 24, 2013

do you hear it

softly it ran past her----it came out of nowhere----rounded and cloudy, it descended from an unknown place

visible to those who would choose to see it's outline----but hidden from the cold ones, the empty souls of the greedy

shush----do you faintly hear it's echo-----no-----it cries for your favor-always turning it's many dispositions

alone in the rainy forest, it tip-toes like it was still crunchy---how i love that sound----and it's hard to recreate it in this moist abandoned island

so closing her heavy portholes  to the world---the wistful lull of her sleep calls her back----and there it sprints past her again so far from her, she questioned it's existence and as she rose to call it back---- she was unable to speak it's name

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  1. This sounds like a misty dream which the narrator is in, one in which she can only observe. A peek into other worlds comes only to those willing to see? I rather like that.

    Thanks for the beautiful words early in the morning (PDT here).

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    1. i love your take on this!!! thanks d.g. :)

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  2. I was thinking dream as well. Lovely!

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  3. Hmmm, makes me think of a fleeting memory. Or maybe one of those moments when you first wake up and you keep trying to hang on to that dream but it quickly slips through your fingers leaving you feeling a little empty and alone.

    I may be way off though lol.

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    1. oh no--i love for people to tell me what they get or feel--thanks theresa :)

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  4. sounds kind of like a dreamy snow fall. love this!

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    1. haha we have snow today judy, maybe that's what got me started :)

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  5. Hmmm. Must have been quite a dream!

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    1. haha yeah, if it were it would have been, sherry :)

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  6. Beautiful imagery! Were the crunchy sounds leaves? Very mysterious! Don't leave us in suspense! Julie

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    1. i will tell you, yes julie the sound was leaves--thank you so much :)

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  7. Excellent words, well crafted! More, please.

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    1. thanks so much susan--i don't have anymore today--but hopefully another day :)

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  8. Wonderful! I agree with the others it sounds like a dream.

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    1. hmmm i am tempted to tell you whether it is a dream or not--but you guys are too much fun for now!! thanks christine ;)

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  9. Bonza imagery of a supernatural being in a dream or nightmare.

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    1. very interesting way of looking at it--thanks :)

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  10. I like that the wistful lull of her sleep; makes me want to think about that on a night of insomnia :)

    very nicely written!

    betty

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  11. Like the whisper of dreams I can never quite recall.

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