softly it ran past her----it came out of nowhere----rounded and cloudy, it descended from an unknown place
visible to those who would choose to see it's outline----but hidden from the cold ones, the empty souls of the greedy
shush----do you faintly hear it's echo-----no-----it cries for your favor-always turning it's many dispositions
alone in the rainy forest, it tip-toes like it was still crunchy---how i love that sound----and it's hard to recreate it in this moist abandoned island
so closing her heavy portholes to the world---the wistful lull of her sleep calls her back----and there it sprints past her again so far from her, she questioned it's existence and as she rose to call it back---- she was unable to speak it's name
This sounds like a misty dream which the narrator is in, one in which she can only observe. A peek into other worlds comes only to those willing to see? I rather like that.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the beautiful words early in the morning (PDT here).
i love your take on this!!! thanks d.g. :)
DeleteI was thinking dream as well. Lovely!
ReplyDeletethanks dana :)
DeleteHmmm, makes me think of a fleeting memory. Or maybe one of those moments when you first wake up and you keep trying to hang on to that dream but it quickly slips through your fingers leaving you feeling a little empty and alone.
ReplyDeleteI may be way off though lol.
oh no--i love for people to tell me what they get or feel--thanks theresa :)
DeleteOooh, haunting and strange.
ReplyDeletethanks libby :)
Deletesounds kind of like a dreamy snow fall. love this!
ReplyDeletehaha we have snow today judy, maybe that's what got me started :)
DeleteHmmm. Must have been quite a dream!
ReplyDeletehaha yeah, if it were it would have been, sherry :)
DeleteBeautiful imagery! Were the crunchy sounds leaves? Very mysterious! Don't leave us in suspense! Julie
ReplyDeletei will tell you, yes julie the sound was leaves--thank you so much :)
DeleteExcellent words, well crafted! More, please.
ReplyDeletethanks so much susan--i don't have anymore today--but hopefully another day :)
DeleteWonderful! I agree with the others it sounds like a dream.
ReplyDeletehmmm i am tempted to tell you whether it is a dream or not--but you guys are too much fun for now!! thanks christine ;)
DeleteBonza imagery of a supernatural being in a dream or nightmare.
ReplyDeletevery interesting way of looking at it--thanks :)
DeleteI like that the wistful lull of her sleep; makes me want to think about that on a night of insomnia :)
ReplyDeletevery nicely written!
betty
i hope it helps!! thanks betty :)
DeleteLike the whisper of dreams I can never quite recall.
ReplyDeletei love that ms. a!!
DeleteWonderful writing, Lynn.
ReplyDeleteawww thanks very much teresa :)
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