the strains of his reality beckoned to
her—she wanted to know it, but she would never--
he held her emotions at bay, saying she
could not be trusted with his reasoning or his visions--
she knew this part was truth---his
reality was fleeting, vanishing---unruly---messy-
the whispers of solitude, haunted her
mind and she cringed as she supposed his hell
but she dare not venture too far in
step---or hold his gaze one second longer--
when had this happened, what irony this
had become---her reality, now out of the shadows--
his untouched by the sanity of
filters--
she kissed his cold forehead as she
abandoned him to save her reality-
This is great; I had to read it several times but I could see how she would have to abandon him to save her reality; I think we all need to do that sometimes with relationships or things in our lives. Very nicely done :)
ReplyDeleteFriday! Getting close to this challenge being done too; its been quite an adventure!
betty
i am glad you took the time to read it and got it---it is getting close--i am going to miss, it i think---thanks corgi
ReplyDeleteWow, this gave me goosebumps, for some reason. Probably from the sense of urgency I get from this piece, and the dire decision she makes. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteoh thanks shelley--i am so happy it affected you this way!
DeleteWOW! Moving and sad.
ReplyDeletethanks so very much :)
Deleteinteresting. Realiity is a hard R as it is so abstract.
ReplyDeletesometimes it really is--thanks sandra
ReplyDeleteI had to read it twice to get a better sense of what was happening. Very poetic.
ReplyDeletethank you so much for taking the time :)
DeleteThis is sad! So, if I'm reading it correctly, his reality is different to hers so she has to leave him :-( You know, working on the internet so much means that I'm not sure what my reality is! Great post!
ReplyDeletewell it is more than that--but ultimately i guess you could say that---thanks so much susan :)
DeleteNice posting today. I have often made the statement, Just wait until reality hits and often, it is just as you have described it with your character in this story.
ReplyDeletethanks--and yes, we are still waiting for some to have it hit, aren't we :)
ReplyDeleteYour story captures a deep sadness at not being able to connect--the human condition. I suppose that's why so many of us like to write. We hope to share our reality with others. Lovely R post, Lynn.
ReplyDeletei think you are right--we are dying to feel a connection--thanks :)
DeleteVery nice post. Sometimes the reality of relationships is that they just don't work. It's tough to know when to let go.
ReplyDeleteit is hard sometimes--thanks sherry :)
DeleteWow, intense and powerful! Great work.
ReplyDeleteSarah Allen
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thanks so much sarah :)
Deletevery intense piece Lynn, some good lines, ultimately what is reality?
ReplyDeleteexactly--thanks rch!
DeleteVery powerful post! I love the idea of trying to save reality.
ReplyDeletethanks dana--i'm glad you liked it!
DeleteEmotional and powerful. Great piece.
ReplyDeletethanks for those wonderful words, christine
DeleteYes, sometimes we must leave behind the past , and the people who inhabit it, so that we may live in the present.
ReplyDeleteunfortunately this is true--thanks for reading
DeleteBeing real hurts sometimes, but it's better than living in fantasy. Real life eventually comes to the surface for us to face.
ReplyDeleteso true --thanks for the comments, brenda :)
DeleteI thought she was saying goodbye to letting his reality have control over her or her emotions and to him because he was dead. But a lot of times stuff goes over my head or I read too much into it. Regardless, I like the way you write. It's thought provoking.
ReplyDeleteit's so nice to see someone take an interest in what a person means when they write-- and although i did have something in mind i think the poem should be whatever someone takes from it-- thanks so much for reading:)
ReplyDeletewow Lynn--haunting and emotional and beautifully written. Terrific post.
ReplyDeletethanks so much, and for taking the time to comment so nicely :)
DeleteVery nicely written. Sometimes saying good-bye isn't easy, but sometimes it needs to be done.
ReplyDeletethis lady in my poem, probably comes back--not for long but in the end--thanks
Deleteman! give me fantasy! reality stinks!
ReplyDeletesometimes that is all too true!
DeleteGood that she left him.
ReplyDeleteyes i see it that way--that she had not choice
DeleteThis is beautifully written! I especially like the line, "His untouched by the sanity of filters," The poor guy just doesn't get it. Sad but true. Julie
ReplyDeleteyes he was at the point, he was unable to--thanks so much :)
DeleteLooking after the Self, I call it. Recognizing when the effort doesn't equal the reward.
ReplyDeleteThe last bit made me think of death, kissing a cold forehead, caskets, etc.
i can see why you would think of death-
DeleteI see her as being caught between two worlds.
ReplyDeletewell in a way she was!
DeleteLynn, you really slow me down during this A to Z frantic visiting thing. I can't help but reread your posts and glare with envy at your talent.
ReplyDeletewow-- that is so sweet-- i so appreciate your interest and your reading-- thanks so much susan:)
ReplyDeleteVery intense and beautiful at the same time. I love reading your blog posts Lynn. You rally have a way with words.
ReplyDeleteoops! really.
Deletei am so glad to have you read them and thank you so much for the kind comments :)
DeleteThis was kind of intense, but I liked it. I think that she made the right decision.
ReplyDeletefor the time she must have had no other decision to make--thanks so much for your wonderful interest :)
DeleteA bit eerie, but back to reality, eh?
ReplyDeleteLee
Places I Remember
Wrote By Rote
An A to Z Co-host blog
haha i guess that is true---thank you arlee :)
Delete'Untouched by the sanity of filters' love that line! :-)
ReplyDeleteoh i am so glad you do, it was one of my favorites too--thanks lily :)
DeleteFun. A bit creepy but I like that!
ReplyDeletewell i'm glad you liked it stephen, thanks :)
DeleteOh what a snippet, Lynn! After reading this, it reminded me (sort of)my clients. I work as an assistant nurse and help the aged in their homes. It's not easy to see them slip away from reality. Must be difficult for this character.
ReplyDeletei am sure it was---thanks cecilia for reading :)
DeleteBeautifully eerie... LOVE it!
ReplyDeletehaha thanks jackie :)
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