Friday, April 20, 2012

reality-- r


the strains of his reality beckoned to her—she wanted to know it, but she would never--

he held her emotions at bay, saying she could not be trusted with his reasoning or his visions--

she knew this part was truth---his reality was fleeting, vanishing---unruly---messy-

the whispers of solitude, haunted her mind and she cringed as she supposed his hell

but she dare not venture too far in step---or hold his gaze one second longer--

when had this happened, what irony this had become---her reality, now out of the shadows--

his untouched by the sanity of filters--

she kissed his cold forehead as she abandoned him to save her reality-

63 comments:

  1. This is great; I had to read it several times but I could see how she would have to abandon him to save her reality; I think we all need to do that sometimes with relationships or things in our lives. Very nicely done :)

    Friday! Getting close to this challenge being done too; its been quite an adventure!

    betty

    ReplyDelete
  2. i am glad you took the time to read it and got it---it is getting close--i am going to miss, it i think---thanks corgi

    ReplyDelete
  3. Wow, this gave me goosebumps, for some reason. Probably from the sense of urgency I get from this piece, and the dire decision she makes. Very well done!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. oh thanks shelley--i am so happy it affected you this way!

      Delete
  4. interesting. Realiity is a hard R as it is so abstract.

    ReplyDelete
  5. sometimes it really is--thanks sandra

    ReplyDelete
  6. I had to read it twice to get a better sense of what was happening. Very poetic.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. thank you so much for taking the time :)

      Delete
  7. This is sad! So, if I'm reading it correctly, his reality is different to hers so she has to leave him :-( You know, working on the internet so much means that I'm not sure what my reality is! Great post!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. well it is more than that--but ultimately i guess you could say that---thanks so much susan :)

      Delete
  8. Nice posting today. I have often made the statement, Just wait until reality hits and often, it is just as you have described it with your character in this story.

    ReplyDelete
  9. thanks--and yes, we are still waiting for some to have it hit, aren't we :)

    ReplyDelete
  10. Your story captures a deep sadness at not being able to connect--the human condition. I suppose that's why so many of us like to write. We hope to share our reality with others. Lovely R post, Lynn.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. i think you are right--we are dying to feel a connection--thanks :)

      Delete
  11. Very nice post. Sometimes the reality of relationships is that they just don't work. It's tough to know when to let go.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. it is hard sometimes--thanks sherry :)

      Delete
  12. very intense piece Lynn, some good lines, ultimately what is reality?

    ReplyDelete
  13. Very powerful post! I love the idea of trying to save reality.

    ReplyDelete
  14. Emotional and powerful. Great piece.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. thanks for those wonderful words, christine

      Delete
  15. Yes, sometimes we must leave behind the past , and the people who inhabit it, so that we may live in the present.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. unfortunately this is true--thanks for reading

      Delete
  16. Being real hurts sometimes, but it's better than living in fantasy. Real life eventually comes to the surface for us to face.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. so true --thanks for the comments, brenda :)

      Delete
  17. I thought she was saying goodbye to letting his reality have control over her or her emotions and to him because he was dead. But a lot of times stuff goes over my head or I read too much into it. Regardless, I like the way you write. It's thought provoking.

    ReplyDelete
  18. it's so nice to see someone take an interest in what a person means when they write-- and although i did have something in mind i think the poem should be whatever someone takes from it-- thanks so much for reading:)

    ReplyDelete
  19. wow Lynn--haunting and emotional and beautifully written. Terrific post.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. thanks so much, and for taking the time to comment so nicely :)

      Delete
  20. Very nicely written. Sometimes saying good-bye isn't easy, but sometimes it needs to be done.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. this lady in my poem, probably comes back--not for long but in the end--thanks

      Delete
  21. man! give me fantasy! reality stinks!

    ReplyDelete
  22. Replies
    1. yes i see it that way--that she had not choice

      Delete
  23. This is beautifully written! I especially like the line, "His untouched by the sanity of filters," The poor guy just doesn't get it. Sad but true. Julie

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. yes he was at the point, he was unable to--thanks so much :)

      Delete
  24. Looking after the Self, I call it. Recognizing when the effort doesn't equal the reward.

    The last bit made me think of death, kissing a cold forehead, caskets, etc.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. i can see why you would think of death-

      Delete
  25. I see her as being caught between two worlds.

    ReplyDelete
  26. Lynn, you really slow me down during this A to Z frantic visiting thing. I can't help but reread your posts and glare with envy at your talent.

    ReplyDelete
  27. wow-- that is so sweet-- i so appreciate your interest and your reading-- thanks so much susan:)

    ReplyDelete
  28. Very intense and beautiful at the same time. I love reading your blog posts Lynn. You rally have a way with words.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. i am so glad to have you read them and thank you so much for the kind comments :)

      Delete
  29. This was kind of intense, but I liked it. I think that she made the right decision.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. for the time she must have had no other decision to make--thanks so much for your wonderful interest :)

      Delete
  30. A bit eerie, but back to reality, eh?


    Lee
    Places I Remember
    Wrote By Rote
    An A to Z Co-host blog

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. haha i guess that is true---thank you arlee :)

      Delete
  31. 'Untouched by the sanity of filters' love that line! :-)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. oh i am so glad you do, it was one of my favorites too--thanks lily :)

      Delete
  32. Fun. A bit creepy but I like that!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. well i'm glad you liked it stephen, thanks :)

      Delete
  33. Oh what a snippet, Lynn! After reading this, it reminded me (sort of)my clients. I work as an assistant nurse and help the aged in their homes. It's not easy to see them slip away from reality. Must be difficult for this character.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. i am sure it was---thanks cecilia for reading :)

      Delete
  34. Beautifully eerie... LOVE it!

    ReplyDelete